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Tell Me a Story
Back when the first primitive humans huddled around an open
fire after a long day of hunting and gathering they shared the events of the
day by grunting and gesturing. Mostly this was to kill time while watching the
day’s kill sizzle to charred doneness over the fire. Then, somewhere along the
way, those grunts and finger points turned into actual dinner conversation. I’ve
often wondered about that first conversation, the first time that early man
managed to string together a subject and a verb into a coherent expression of
his thoughts. I don’t think that first sentence was a rambling narrative of the
teller’s opinion as to why the weather has turned colder, or a complaint that
dinner was a tad overdone. I don’t even think it was about sex or even a
recounting of the teller’s heroics during the day’s hunt and why the teller
should now be immediately voted chief of the clan. I think the first sentence
ever uttered was very simple, ‘tell me a story.’ I think people wanted, and
still want, a good, old fashioned story. Of course, I believe the second
sentence was probably a rambling opinion or a glorified tale of the hunter’s
prowess, his qualifications as clan leader, and why he should have the
prettiest woman and the lion’s share of the meat. This later became the
political stump speech and even later the ‘blog’. The third sentence uttered
was probably a fart joke. I don’t think early man qualified his request for a
story with ‘give me a character-driven narrative’ or ‘give me an in-depth
description of the main character’s thoughts and feeling as he hurled his spear
toward the antelope,’ I think he just wanted to hear about people or animals or
even the gods of that time, doing things. It wasn’t until the invention of
puffery by the romanticists in the 18th century that character driven
narratives and deep introspection evolved to plague the storyline. When Homer
penned the Iliad and the Odyssey stories were about people, gods and creatures
actually doing things.
OK, we all love a good story but I’m finding good stories
harder and harder to come by. I read books that have great characters, the
heroes and heroines have depth, they are multi-dimensional, full of angst or
humor or perseverance in the face of calamity, but they tend not to ‘do’ much
of anything throughout the story (unless you count their constant spewing of
angst and introspection). I find that a lot of authors tend to get bogged down
in the character’s introspection, or in the background information of the
novel. I have even seen authors describe the scenery in agonizing length,
taking the reader from anticipation to boredom until the story line dies. I
tried to read a Barbara Kingsolver novel recently, it started off innocently
enough, describing a very bucolic scene of a deer drinking at a stream in the
forest with sunlight sifting through the tree branches. Thirty-two pages later
that same damned deer was still drinking at the same damned stream and I now
knew more than I ever wanted to know about the many ways sunlight can sift
through leaves. I personally don’t hunt game, but by this point I was hoping a
hunter would come crashing through the forest, shotgun poised, and blow that
dear to bits. I also hoped that hunter would then reload start in on those
damned leaves. So, on page thirty-three I got up, walked to the window and
pitched the book into my back yard. I hope the sun gently filters through the
leaves toward it for a long, long time.
A novel should be like a river flowing to the sea, the
current pushes the plot along and the characters react to the changes in the
flow and speed of the water. In their little character boat they survive the
white water, curse the doldrums, or go down with the ship, but the focus should
be on the journey to the sea, not those journeying. When the current slows, and
the boat begins to flounder in the backwater, the reader quickly loses
interest. But when that boat is sucked into class five rapids, and rushes along
at a good clip, the reader’s heart begins to beat a little faster eyes are
glued to the text, fingers poised to flip to the next exciting page. This is
not the time so pause and tell the reader what boat company made the boat, that
the boat maker’s tools were passed down from his father or that his daughter
has a large nose, that’s the best way to lose the momentum of the book, and in
doing so, lose the reader. Now, I’m no enemy of sub-plots. A good sub-plot can
add to the depth of the book and give the reader a change of scenery, and/or
let characters and take a breath after an exciting passage in the book. Notice
I said after, not during. I have seen lots of writers try to ‘create suspense’
by switching scenes to a sub-plot in the middle the action. This may suspend
the action enough for your reader to start eyeing his open window. Also, be careful
of how much time you spend in the sub-plot(s). Never linger in the subplot so
long that the reader loses the string of the major plot line. The major
plot-line should always be going full speed ahead in the reader’s mind.
OK, so yes, I’m a story-driven writer. I feel that the story
should drive the characters and the characters should, in turn, react to the
twists and turns of the plot. And when my characters start messing with my plot
I calmly remind them that ‘I’m the writer here, and with a quick visit to the ‘replace
all’ function I could change their names from Brick and Dominique to Eugene and
Bertha. Like the Gods of old I speaketh to them; ‘I made thee and I can take
thee out, so don’t tryith it’. I’ve even had to threaten to ‘pull this book
over and turn it around’ from time to time when my characters started to wander
off toward the edges of my story outline.
Character driven novels move along at the whim of the
characters and usually with a lot of ruminating, soul searching and belly-button
staring contemplation. I don’t give my characters that kind of time. If you
give your characters even a little slack time they will soon be eyeing the
edges of the storyline and began to shuffle, ever so casually and stealthily,
away from the plot. When I see them start to look introspective I quickly send
in a tornado or have an alligator turn up in their bathtub. That’ll show those
slackers. Of course I’ll go back a couple of chapters and plant the seeds of
catastrophe very subtly so the characters won’t know what’s coming. They may
ask ‘why the sudden appearance of my ten year old nephew and why are you having
him flush his pet baby alligator down my toilet’’ I smile and say, ‘just keep
to the storyline and you have nothing worry about.’ I alone know what these
mutineers will be plotting a mere few chapters on, and now I’m ready for them.
Whether the plot drives the characters or the characters
drive the plot, the major plot is still the overriding premise of the book. You
should be able to express the premise in an ‘elevator description’. One or two
sentences that describe the major plot that can be communicated in the average
ride in an elevator. From that major premise you began to break out your
scenes. I find it helpful to create a flow-chart depicting the major actions
that will happen in each scene:
The flow should depict the continuity of scenes, each
following logically from the one before. Once you have a general idea of the
action that will happen in each scene you can begin fleshing things out. The
first bit of flesh to be added is the opening scene. The first scene should
draw the readers in and make them want to read on. This is not the place for
background information or a narrative about the history of the characters (or
to go on and on about the sun drifting through the leaves). That will mire up
your story before it even gets out of the gate and the reader will glance again
at that open window (you don’t want to see the sun filtering thorough the
leaves onto your book). The first scene should be action or a mystery or
steamy, or anything to spark the reader’s interest right away and draw them
into the story. You can acquaint them with the characters later, preferably
through another character’s eyes and thoughts or through dialogue. Be careful
here though, dialogue can also bore the reader and slow the pace if you don’t
pair it with some physical movement. I try to have my characters do something
while they are talking, even if it’s just driving or eating. Try to break up
long strings of dialogue with a visual image of the character doing something.
I think everybody who has read Atlas Shrugged has skipped over half of John
Gault’s radio speech in the middle of the book - talk about beating a dead
horse. You don’t want to do anything that will make the reader put the book
down. A tip I got from Tom Robbins is to ‘never mention food or sex in a scene
or you will make the reader hungry or horny and he or she may just put your
book down and go in search of something more satisfying than the written word’.
Of course this doesn’t apply to erotica or restaurant reviews.
Here is an example of where I managed to put some action
between the lines of dialogue.
‘What is it you want Deputy’’ Dorcas still didn’t turn from
her keyboard. She was twisting her joystick and moving and clicking her mouse
that brought images closer in whatever screen she chose. Blazer watched Dorcas’s
eyes scan the screens as the camera changed from location to location, from
grocery store, to convenience store to liquor store faster than Blazer could
follow them. The fleeting images were different, but similar. A hopeful face in
each camera before a backdrop of stocked shelves and beer packed coolers, and a
clerk presenting that hopeful face with a lottery ticket.
‘Am I interrupting your lunch?’ Blazer Moore lurked, leaning
in the doorjamb.
Ok, we have the action moving along and we have the
characters doing something while they are talking, the next thing to worry
about is voice. Volumes can, and have been written about the use of voice and
tone in novels. In relation to the plot, just remember to be careful when
changing voice so as not to disrupt the flow of the story. This was the hardest
lesson for me to learn, to use only one narrative voice per scene. My
characters all want to be the center of attention and they all have something
so say in every scene so I keep my finger threateningly poised over the ‘replace
all’ button. Like our caveman story-telling around the fire, it’s a one person
job. If too many storytellers start talking the listeners won’t know who to
listen to. The reader is seeing action unfold in a scene and he or she can only
see it through one set of eyes. More than one voice per scene can confuse the
reader and disrupt the pace.
Now, your book be cruising along, plot purring like a well
oiled machine, your characters spinning in a well greased groove and then you
realize you’ve written yourself into a corner. Your main character is poised on
the edge of a cliff over an abyss and an army of bad guys is closing in. You
will be tempted to use a plot device - suddenly your character looks down and
finds a parachute as his or her feet, or the ultimate plot device the deus ex
machine. Suddenly a huge bird flies over and your main character grasps his
mighty claw and is carried to safety. Resist the temptation to use a cheesy
plot device. Or, if you must, go back and first introduce that plot device
earlier in the book, like that baby alligator dropped into the toilet.
So, you have honed your premise to that two sentence
description, you have broken out your story scene by scene and have begun your
first scene with something to draw your reader in and you are steering your
boat of characters through the fast moving current. Now is not the time to let
down your guard and watch that plot boat float gently down the stream. If your
characters are anything like mine old Bertha and Eugene are already plotting
their next mutiny.
About Mark
Mark Covington was born and raised in Ruther Glen, Virginia. He attended Caroline County public
schools and Benedictine Military School in Richmond. He holds a Bachelors degree in Organizational Behavior from Averett College in Danville, VA and a Masters degree in Industrial Psychology from Springfield College in Springfield MA. Mark has worked as a Banker, a College Professor, a Management Consultant, an Ice Cream Truck Driver, a Cemetery Plot salesman and a State Government Bureaucrat and an Information Systems Project Manager. He currently lives in Richmond Virginia Museum District. with his wife Beverly and their two Australian Shepherds, Journey and Opal, where he writes novels exploring the cosmically comical nature of the universe, the purpose of which is to create someone who lives in Richmond, Virginia and writes novels exploring the cosmically comical nature of the universe.
Mark Covington was born and raised in Ruther Glen, Virginia. He attended Caroline County public
schools and Benedictine Military School in Richmond. He holds a Bachelors degree in Organizational Behavior from Averett College in Danville, VA and a Masters degree in Industrial Psychology from Springfield College in Springfield MA. Mark has worked as a Banker, a College Professor, a Management Consultant, an Ice Cream Truck Driver, a Cemetery Plot salesman and a State Government Bureaucrat and an Information Systems Project Manager. He currently lives in Richmond Virginia Museum District. with his wife Beverly and their two Australian Shepherds, Journey and Opal, where he writes novels exploring the cosmically comical nature of the universe, the purpose of which is to create someone who lives in Richmond, Virginia and writes novels exploring the cosmically comical nature of the universe.
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